I’m pretty sure I understand, but I could’ve used a little more clarification about what Justin means by this, so I could absorb the full importance of what he’s saying. (Maybe just an extra word or two, not even a whole sentence. ) Or perhaps my brain is tired. In other words, this last bit of dialogue feels a little vague, content-wise, but the emotional intent and intensity comes through very clearly.

They'll discuss it a little more in the next chapter.

Well, "discuss" might be too strong a word for them.


This killed. Me. Dead. My second favorite moment from all of your fic chapters.

WOW! I was pretty crazy about this scene, too. But tell me... what is number one??

Exactly the tone I was hoping you’d end with. I can’t explain how much I love it when things go wrong for the two of them in just the right way. I never saw this coming, and for the first time in a while, I have no idea where you’ll go with the storylines from here.

Well, I have the entire next chapter written except for one section, so you should see fairly soon!

Ok, now I'm off to get some sleep. I apologize for taking so long with the feedback, again, but I needed time to think about what had happened.

I'm sorry it took me so long to reply, but I was in LA, as you know. I just want to thank you for taking the time to do this, I love talking to you about my fiction!

Xie