As you have already got sooo many comments, I'm sure everything I want to say has already been said (I didn't read through all the comments, but those I read covered nicely what I was going to say, plus they put it into words better than I ever could) - but as a writer myself I know how important feedback is, so I'll write something anyway.

You made me all teary-eyed at points, then had me cracking up about something else. I think Melanie's and Justin's POV are really 'in character' - if that's how you call it (forgive me, I'm not a native English speaker) and I especially liked your Mel. It was interesting to read her view of things because that's quite clearly unusual.

You have a unique way with words and I think that's why I sat here all afternoon and read all three/four parts and couldn't get away from my desk. Your writing style is amazing and I'm looking forward to reading more of your works :)

xaimeex