Xie, it doesnt get any better than this. I am sitting in my livingroom, Saturday moring, a hot steamy cup of coffee, 3 dogs lounging, one actually propped up on my shoulder, a hawk sounding nearby, and sweet lord a new chapter of Plans on my flist. *Sniff, sniff, heavy sigh*
I'm staring at the computer screen, just loving that the new chapter is there waitingfor me. I suddenly feel so relaxed. OK enough chit chat, on with your story.
Brian was half asleep and half passed out on the couch after his and Michael’s marathon revisiting of their stoner youth. I stood looking at him for a minute, and then reached down, grabbed his hand, and said, “Let’s go upstairs. You don’t want Gus to see you like this.” How can I be tearful during the first paragraph? I am though. I am in love with Justin taking care of Brian. It reminds me that Brian was not nurtured as a child, and I adore the love that Justin has for him, to nuture the child in Brian. To be the adult that loves the child, healing Brians past wounds in that simple act. That Brian has that, makes me tearful with joy.
I thought I felt his lips twitch and decided he was faking being asleep. I put my finger in my mouth and wet it, and slipped it down between his legs and worked it between his cheeks and touched it to his asshole. He groaned and said, “If you think I’m too hung over to notice, I’m not.” Faking sleep. So clever how you carry that idea to the next chapter. Loving it! And Justin's foreplay...hahaha you are funny!
That sex scene, was almost unbearable. Maybe its me. Maybe I am crazy emotional today. I have not read any other comments, 'm just reading and posting together. But this: “Merry Christmas.” was just too much. The sex scene was riveting. My chest was tight, I was short of breath, and then just tearful again with the ending.
How do you write the timeline so well? It keeps it so compelling. First it is Christmas eve, then back at the Babylon opening, then at the airport at the weekend visit, then again on Christmas morning. I was never confused, it flows so nicely. WOW!
his right hand reached down inside my sweats and grabbed my thigh, pulling it up roughly and then slipping down and cradling my balls. He held them gently, then closed his hand just a little on them, and pressed his lips to the spot where my neck curves into my shoulder, where it always makes me crazy, and said, "Talk." Oh that is cruel. I am grinning and laughing in an evil way.
I'm wiped out. There is too many parts to this story that I adored. I started to comment as I read, bit by bit, but then I just got consumed by the story, and couldnt be bothered with stopping to comment.
I dont know what to say. I have to read this over, and I dont usually do read-overs.
A couple things come to mind: I was kind of hating your Lindsey. But then somehow, her soft moments with Mel allowed me to feel better about her.
I loved how you did the gathering at Debs, how we were able to witness so many different things going on in the house at once, and how we intruded on Lindsey and Justin's conversation outside, already in progress. Interesting that way. To join in rather than enter it from the beginning.
You wrapped up everything in such a sweet way. This is how Brian and Justin continued after S5.
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I'm staring at the computer screen, just loving that the new chapter is there waitingfor me. I suddenly feel so relaxed. OK enough chit chat, on with your story.
Brian was half asleep and half passed out on the couch after his and Michael’s marathon revisiting of their stoner youth. I stood looking at him for a minute, and then reached down, grabbed his hand, and said, “Let’s go upstairs. You don’t want Gus to see you like this.”
How can I be tearful during the first paragraph? I am though. I am in love with Justin taking care of Brian. It reminds me that Brian was not nurtured as a child, and I adore the love that Justin has for him, to nuture the child in Brian. To be the adult that loves the child, healing Brians past wounds in that simple act. That Brian has that, makes me tearful with joy.
I thought I felt his lips twitch and decided he was faking being asleep. I put my finger in my mouth and wet it, and slipped it down between his legs and worked it between his cheeks and touched it to his asshole. He groaned and said, “If you think I’m too hung over to notice, I’m not.”
Faking sleep. So clever how you carry that idea to the next chapter. Loving it!
And Justin's foreplay...hahaha you are funny!
That sex scene, was almost unbearable. Maybe its me. Maybe I am crazy emotional today. I have not read any other comments, 'm just reading and posting together. But this:
“Merry Christmas.” was just too much. The sex scene was riveting. My chest was tight, I was short of breath, and then just tearful again with the ending.
How do you write the timeline so well?
It keeps it so compelling. First it is Christmas eve, then back at the Babylon opening, then at the airport at the weekend visit, then again on Christmas morning. I was never confused, it flows so nicely. WOW!
his right hand reached down inside my sweats and grabbed my thigh, pulling it up roughly and then slipping down and cradling my balls. He held them gently, then closed his hand just a little on them, and pressed his lips to the spot where my neck curves into my shoulder, where it always makes me crazy, and said, "Talk."
Oh that is cruel. I am grinning and laughing in an evil way.
I'm wiped out. There is too many parts to this story that I adored.
I started to comment as I read, bit by bit, but then I just got consumed by the story, and couldnt be bothered with stopping to comment.
I dont know what to say. I have to read this over, and I dont usually do read-overs.
A couple things come to mind:
I was kind of hating your Lindsey. But then somehow, her soft moments with Mel allowed me to feel better about her.
I loved how you did the gathering at Debs, how we were able to witness so many different things going on in the house at once, and how we intruded on Lindsey and Justin's conversation outside, already in progress. Interesting that way. To join in rather than enter it from the beginning.
You wrapped up everything in such a sweet way. This is how Brian and Justin continued after S5.
So much thanks!!
xo
R